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I wrote this for a school project and my teacher wanted me to publish it, so please critique before I do that. Also, I need a title. Thanks!

some words need catching

not in fishnets

for skinning and eating

but like butterflies

because they are beautiful

and we want to pin their wings to the page

preserved forever

 

some words need catching

because they are mine

and we are all greedy

i want to tie myself down here

keep myself safe

i’m afraid to lose any flicker of me

and fade to chalk brittle bone

 

some words need catching

and displaying on the wall

i want everyone to hear me

shouting off the paper

so my words will live in all their souls

and beautiful things will grow there

and they will know my words are strong

and their souls are good

i want them to listen

tell them

 

Here I Am!

and

This Is Me!

 

 

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First of all beautiful, publish it. Definitely. 

 

Title idea: catch the ones that fly

critique to come soon, I promise

One thing before I forget: 

4 hours ago, Apollo's Lover said:

some words need catching

not in fishnets

for skinning and eating

but like butterflies

because they are beautiful

Maybe try after “for skinning and eating” 

“but instead with butterfly nets/ because like butterflies/ they are caught for their beauty”

Mention the net again so it gives a stronger contrast. 

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