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EDITOR'S PICK: don't listen to me

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Guest lilliandemott

i didn't turn out for it to end this way, it kinda just happened.....

 

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Guest Anna, Cicada Associate Editor

The use of white space between stanzas is really working here--communicates a struggle to articulate. 

 

(PS: we're all here and we're listening!)

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Guest ksandstrum

Totally agree.  Love the stanza spacing.  It conveys this sorta...loss for words, maybe.  An inner struggle to say what you really need to and what your audience wants to hear.

And yup, we're here for you. *internet hug* 

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Guest Anna, Cicada Associate Editor

Right or just--it puts you right in that moment, when you're trying to tell someone something, and the whole mind goes blank of words but soooo full of feeling. 

 

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Guest The21stKatherine

I comlpetely agree.  I also love the way that the lines are broken up, kind of like a) someone crying or b) the feeling when you're trying to articulate the random, broken strings of thoughts in your head but can't.

I'm gonna have to make this internet hug a group hug. :P *joins hug* 

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Guest lilliandemott

don't listen to me when i say go away,

i need you here with me.

 

don't listen to me when i say i hate you,

 

 

 

 

 

i am scared to be hurt again.

dont listen to me when i say i'm fine,

im broken inside.

don't listen to me when i say you dont have to worry about me,

the knife is in my bag,

don't listen to when i say i'll see you tomorrow,

i won't be there. 

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Guest kvh2020

Wow. How did I miss this piece? This is so simple and so full of emotion.

We love you <33

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